Problem Statement
The[RD1]
problem to be addressed by this study is inequality between the sexes[RD2]
in collegiate athletics. Although the introduction of Title IX helped
facilitate a change in some areas of collegiate athletics, it has not provided
a conclusion
to the issue at hand[RD3] .
With the changing times and exuberant [RD4] amounts
of money being poured[RD5]
into college programs and facilities, the gap between men’s and women’s
athletics continues to widen. While the intend was to bring the men’s and women’s closer together [RD6] it appears the opposite has occurs.
With over 80% of educational
institutions are not in compliance with the Title IX as it pertains to
athletics, it seems as though the issue may never be resolve (WSF ,2019). [RD7]
It [RD8] is
mathematically impossible for institutions and administrations to meet theses[RD9]
understanding of gender equity. So institutions and administrations are
strapped giving more overall money to men than give more to women sports. This
reason is why gender equity in sports is currently impossible (Gerstmann,
2019).
The Equity in Athletics Disclosure Act of
1994, made it mandatory for institutions and administrations receiving federal
funds to make all gender-equality statistics about their athletic programs
available to everyone (Ross, 2015).
As Title IX prepares to celebrate its 40th
anniversary this year, we[RD10] believe that many
women of our generation are ready to move beyond the comforting fiction that
equality of opportunity, and rough parity with boys, is enough for female
athletes. It's time to stop celebrating the raw numbers and to start figuring
out how to improve the quality of women's athletic experiences (qt. [RD11] Ross, 2015).
[RD1]Please
address indenting
[RD2]What
do you mean by the sexes
[RD3]Be sure to adhere to an academic tone in your writing.
Avoid using jargon, informal/casual language, idiomatic expressions, or clichés
in formal writing.
•Avoid making broad
generalizations (i.e., always, never).
•Avoid using
over-sweeping adjectives (outstanding, obvious).
•Avoid using adverbs
(really, clearly).
•Avoid qualifiers or
inexact language (a little, definitely).
Approximations of quantity (e.g., quite a large part, practically all,
beautiful, or very few) are interpreted differently by different readers or in
different contexts. Approximations
weaken statements.
•Avoid emotional
language (It is heartbreaking that so many are starving).
•Avoid inflammatory
language (Smith’s study was terrible, sickening, sad).
[RD4]Please
address word choice
[RD5]Please
address word choice
[RD6]What
do you mean by closer together
[RD7]Reading
more like a magazine article then a problem statment
[RD8]To avoid confusion, please do not
start a sentence with a pronoun
[RD9]Please
give the document a solid edit
[RD10]Who
is we
[RD11]What
is this